It's very clear that your strength is writing. Slow the the text so we can read it, I was actually interested in it! For what it is, it's an admirable project. I hope to get something like this together at some point, I understand making a game is tough though. You're writing is quality, so I think it should be integrated into the directions. Instead of "get to the bar", I think the directions could be written in first person: "I'm thristy, and I might as well get acquainted with the locals while I'm here." Good luck in the future.